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She had a tendency to take
The stars from her eyes and
Gingerly pin them too my chest.

I asked why she felt it so important
For me to wear a black shirt when
She adorned me with her sparkles.

She told me that it made her feel
Like she was sleeping in the sky.
I asked her if that was better then

Sleeping with me, yet she was already asleep.





©2003-2009 `kindred
:iconkindred:

Author's Comments

I showed this to a couple people, and I got mixed reviews on if they liked or not. More so, on if they even understood it.

I thought I would post it anyway thanks to some encouragement from ~ repus =) (Smile)

For a couple guys I know. But mostly for me.

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:icontorn-pages:
it is good, as long as she is not sleeping with the feeeeshes!
:iconrottedaspersions:
I really like this, but its so strange, so strange...
It makes me wonder....

--
Spend some quality time with the demon of mine;
I like the way you struggle, but you know Im here to win.
Spend some quality time with my borrowed smile;
The gleam is replaced, rip me open and erase me
:iconaenim-a:
this si amazing


sierirously...

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comment, to get comments.
share your kindness, not your hate.
love the art, before yourself.

meditate on this. [link]
:iconrcybergeek:
Hmmm...
Very interesting. I sense more depth than my mind is currently processing. I will have to think on this one.

--
rCyberGeek

:iconproud-americans:
Fool-proof my code?! I think you under estimate the power of the fool.
:iconrebelchic:
I liked this. But I'd change the word asleep to something else. It sound repeatitive with the sleeping than asleep, if you know what I'm saying. Perhaps something like, "yet she was already dreaming." Or something.

I liek ur pome.

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:shakefist:
:iconjsenn:
I love the center of this poem, its imagination and its plot.

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J:heart:y
:iconchrzrus:
I dig this...different and it takes a neat twist at the end. Sweet and thought provoking! Nice work!

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*Channing, William Ellery ~ Difficulties are meant to rouse, not discourage.

*Yevgeny Zamyatin~The most wonderful thing in life is to be delirious and the most wonderful kind of delirium is being in love.
:icondeadspaceheart:
You and Heather have both recently written about stars. I think I influence you guys way too much. :D (Big Grin)
Anywhoo, this is good. Different from your usual style. Seems so anyway. I just like what it says. I don't know. I suck at comments.
:iconrepus:
DAMMIT...!

da ate my comment on this...Angered

jesus harold christ, this still really hurts my feelings because she never even fucking cared...Sad Angel

--
writers bleed words...

freewill
over
fate...

...which do you choose (pick one)

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